The Mad Queen And Her Daughter

Re: The Mad Queen And Her Daughter

feeds@yuku.com (TomB1) — Tue, 19 Aug 2008 09:10:15 GMT

Welcome to the Board. I found this an engaging story even with the gap. There are a few internal inconsistencies the two most bothersome being:

1] The pirates appear to have gunpowder but the rest of the story seems medieval

2] Amber did not go to the Princess Training School contrary to what she says at the end but was already a Princess and was mere polished for her new role by her father.

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 16:52:10 GMT

Chapter Seventeen-Peace Breaks Out.

It took a while to get things sorted out and for Amber's order to stop attacking to be transferred down through the ranks of her army. Whilst the soldiers who used to fight for Queen Yocasta held the Royal Palace, Chancellor Montor and Queen Amber, each with a couple of bodyguards, met in neutral ground outside it.

"I'm willing, for the sake of a quiet life, to give an amnesty to all of your soldiers in exchange for...

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 16:51:00 GMT

Amber rode on horseback with her commanders beside her. Behind her the army that had in effect formed itself marched and sang.

We'll break right through Yocasta's line, hurrah,hurrah
We'll break right through Yocasta's line, hurrah,hurrah
We'll break right through Yocasta's line
We'll f**k the women and drink the wine
And we'll all do well when Amber comes marching home.

"I'm worried," she said....

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 16:48:20 GMT

Chapter Fifteen-Onwards

With only one day of rest, to cut down trees to make long sharp pikes, Amber's army closed in on the capital. They were tired and their feet ached but their morale was high.Rather then fighting with them, the patrols who policed the towns had retreated or even come over to their side. Amber had given strict instructions only to fight in self defence or if a major battle happened, and not to loot or destroy houses.Of course there were a few embittered...

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 16:46:47 GMT

Chapter Fourteen-Opening Chrysta's Grave

Queen Yocasta knew what was going on.At least, a part of her did.A part of her remembered the death of her daughter and knew that the girls presented to her every day were fake princesses. So she and a small group of trusted bodyguards, who had saved her life more then once as she was not a popular Queen and many wanted her dead, went to the marble Hall of the Dead where the dead Kings, Queens, Princes and Princesses were buried in tombs...

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 16:29:34 GMT

Chapter Thirteen The Invasion.

The people gathered around the tower and cheered until their throats were hoarse, and freed their friends and relatives who had been locked up earlier for opposing the occupation. Only seven of the pirates had been killed during the fight. Amber said to the citizens "Members of the Home Army, members of the Vandersil Police, citizens, I declare today a national holiday. We will bury our dead and then we must strike Valermoore quickly.
I hate...

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 16:28:01 GMT

Sadly, chapter 12 was lost, but it was about the freeing of Vandersil from it's occupiers.

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 16:25:43 GMT

Chapter Eleven-Vandersil under Occupation

The days went by and Amber made no further attempts to cause trouble or to try and escape. She became friendly with her captors, singing to them in the evening, telling them jokes and stories and keeping them amused. And they trusted her and let her walk around the ship. At last they reached the port of Vandersil, the City of Bronze, famed for it's riches, a place where even the poor were fed.Normally the sun would be gleaming off the...

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 16:17:27 GMT

Chapter Ten-Pirates!

The Swiftbolt was a ship well named. Captain Joshua Tibbs, at least, said that no ship had ever outrun her. And his crew had to admit that had been their experience, as well. In fact, the run-down vessel they were chasing now would be easy prey.

"Captain, are you sure this one's worth it? I mean, look at it. It's kind of pathetic."

The captain, who was a very short man (standing a full head lower than his shortest...

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 16:13:56 GMT

Chapter Nine-Sailing Away

As soon as she was out of sight of Queen Yocasta' s castle, Amber took a long look at the map which the guards had given her. "Let's see.I can take a route through the Barrow Downs and down to Karnivahl and...no. I don't have anywhere near enough money, so a sea trip it will have to be." She walked slowly, as if there was nothing to fear, out of sight of Queen Yocasta's castle, expecting every minute that a squad of guards would...

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 16:07:16 GMT

Chapter Eight-The Knives Are Out

The guards dragged the body of Amy to the Royal Ovens. "Oi! What do you think you're doing? You can't burn dead bodies here or we'll all end up with disease, from the lowest gong-scourer to the Queen herself." It was the Chief Royal Cook who spoke, his hands on his hips, ignoring the fact that the guards were armed. "Throw the body into some unused dungeon cell instead." The guards looked at each other and then decided...

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 15:58:04 GMT

Chapter Seven-The Princess Trainer

Chancellor Montor had a special squad of guards formed up and spoke to them in the Council Chamber. "You are to be known as the Princess Escort to impose the new Princess Draft. Your job is to search the city and the farms outside it and bring me three girls who look rather like Princess Chrysta used to. I don't want beggars, but I don't want daughters of the nobility either. I'm looking for the daughters of farmers, merchants,...

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 15:54:19 GMT

Chapter Six-Amber's Escape

Amber let out a scream. "Please don't hurt my father, and I promise that I'll be the best daughter of yours ever, I'll play the part to perfection, I'll..."

"Gag her," snapped the Queen, and a nearby torturer thrust a strip of cloth into Amber's mouth and tied it tightly, shutting off her protests. The Queen strode up to Grand Duke Lariton. "Tell me the truth and your daughter will not be executed...

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 15:50:12 GMT

Chapter Five-Amber Unmasked.

The Queen scowled when the spy came in. "First, take that pair of underpants off your head at once. Then give me your report and get out of here."

"Your Majesty, she...she referred to Grand Duke Lariton as her father and kissed him on both cheeks. And it was the Grand Duke who got her to ask that his former realm be restored to him." The spy faltered at the sight of the Queen's angry red face.

The Queen strode...

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 15:48:13 GMT

Chapter Four-Amber the actress

Queen Yocasta took Amber's hands in hers and began kissing her forehead over and over again. "Poor you, the bite from that nasty Vindscreen Viper must have really hurt you. You're still shaking from it's effects."

Amber forced her voice into a range slightly lower then normal so that she would sound like Chrysta when she spoke. "Mother,I thought I was going to die that day. Please, please don't marry me off...

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 15:46:06 GMT

Chapter Three-Amber becomes Chrysta

The next day the Chancellor went to meet the Queen. "Your Majesty, your daughter has been bitten by a dangerous water snake, a Vindscreen Viper. She will require five days of bed rest and the Royal doctors have told me that you should not visit her in that time."

The Queen nodded. "I understand, but I want to see her without fail or the doctors will be in trouble."

The Chancellor bowed and left and went to...

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feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 15:43:49 GMT

Chapter Two-Death of a Princess

Then the Queen strolled into the Great Hall and smiled at her daughter.

"Yocasta, where is my jester? I feel in need of amusement."

"Your jester is amusing the guards, they deserve a laugh once in a while. It is said that the court of King Mendar has plenty of jesters and I intend that you will enjoy their company, and be a Queen in your own right, as his wife."

Chrysta frowned. "Surely you're...

The Mad Queen And Her Daughter

feeds@yuku.com (Vizier Mountian) — Sun, 17 Aug 2008 15:39:57 GMT

The Story Part 1-Secret Love

Princess Chrysta strolled up and down within a grove of oaks in the gardens of Castle Roquat, taking care to keep out of sight of the guards on the walls. She heard rustling behind her and spun around. Thaddeus the Jester stood before her in his pointy Fool's Cap and red and white striped clothes, a pair of outlandish pointy leather boots on his feet. He bowed to her. "It took a bit longer then normal as I was afraid of being watched. I'm...